Tuesday, April 23, 2013

poem

1. In the back of room 70 on a Thursday night
2. The lastest issue comes together,  as people fall apart
3. Here we are writing, keyboards are humming
4. Here we are dancing,  the strobe lights, mind-numbing
5. Here we are screaming, "just get your crap done!"
6. The maze of a room, filled with chairs, lined with people overheats to 92
7.But there are Feltes and Goodall, still dancing in the back room
8. Eating fuels these late-night ventures
9. Family dinner and constant snacks
10. Keep the staff on the productive track
11. We will finish at 9 but never be done
12. As deadline approaches, everyone gets tired
13. The energy, the dancing, the music expired
14. Finally, the lights are turned off and the door is locked
15. "See everyone tomorrow at 10 o'clock

Lines 2, 3, 4-anaphora- " here we are" Is repeated over 3 lines
Line 6- asyndeton- no conjunction between "room" and "filled" or "chairs" and "lined"
Line 7- imagery- paints picture of Annie and Goodall dancing in thr back room
Line 8- inversion- instead of "the late night ventures are fueled by eating"
Line 8- archaic diction-ventures

2 comments:

  1. If I had to describe Torch to anyone.... I would use this!

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  2. I hope you shared this with the other Torchies! I really like line # 11 and the rhyming couplets, especially lines 12 and 13.

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